What Lovely Bones
The man runs for his life. The dried leaves crunch under his, formerly, white shoes. He doesn’t know where he is or where he is going, all he knows that he needs to go far away from the figure pursuing him.
A trail of blood is left behind him. His left hand is clutching the bleeding stump of his right one, a lack of fingers clearly noticeable. The forest provides him no shelter as he tries to maneuver inside it.
‘Just go straight. There should be a way out straight ahead, right?’ His train of thought is interrupted when one of his foot hits a big chunk of rock and he falls face-first on the ground, hard. The man feels his two front teeth getting knocked out and spits out dirt and blood. He cries out, despite himself, as he momentarily forgets about his mutilated hand and puts too much pressure on it in his effort to scramble himself off the ground.
“What an unsightly scene we have here.”
The man’s blood runs cold in his veins. Fear making his arms weak and letting him fall back down. His sanity quivers as he hears the sound of hissing around him. So loud that it seemed like he had fallen right into a pit of angry snakes.
“I’m afraid our little game ends here. Now, be a dear and let me see your face.”
No. He will not. He will definitely not. This is all just a bad dream and he will wake up in his bed, safe and sound. His hand will turn out fine. He will go on with his life as usual.
CRACK!
His head twists in the complete opposite direction of his body as the sound echoes around the area. Wide, glassy eyes stare into the face of the man’s tormentor, showcasing the remnants of terrified shock in the last moment of his—rather short—life. His nightmare smiles, resting their forehead against his and delighting in the macabre position he ended up in. Their gorgeous face marred by a splatter of dried blood across their cheeks and nose.
“I wonder,” they hum as they stand up to drag the lifeless man behind them by his hair, “if the stray dogs are still hungry.”
The town of Helmsford, Connecticut, in the 80s can be considered as your average small town in the middle of nowhere. That is if you pay no mind to the seemingly random disappearances and murders that happen here. But it is almost an art form, the way the townsfolk have learned to ignore them and forget it all with time.
You are the youngest surgeon in town and considered to be a prodigy of some sort. With a career in the medical field, you are much too used to dead bodies and hysterical patients. But... it is not the complete reason for that, is it?
A surgeon who kills deliberately. The irony is not lost on you. Dubbing yourself as a vigilante while law enforcements consider you no different from the fugitives you hunt, you have no intention of letting your perfect mask slip and disrupt your entire routine.
When an officer from the local police department is unlucky enough to nose into your business and finds the secrets you hid in your basement, you have no choice but to silence him forever. Little did you know that this particular event would lead to an oncoming threat to the balance you had cleverly managed to keep in your life.
And you will soon learn that you cannot always outrun the karma that you hellishly dish out to others.
Park Jae-sung (Jason) / Park Jae-eun (Jane) [M/F]: An overall prickly individual, J Park is not someone that people would like to talk to on their own accord. People often refer to them as a person still stuck in their rebellious phase, much to their annoyance. After dropping out of business school, they are now lazing around at their home and trying to make it big in the music industry. It is clear that they don’t like people in general but you cannot help but notice that their chilly attitude does a complete 180° around you.
Their lovestruck gaze follows you everywhere they can, eager for your attention and affection alike. They have been in love with you since you were kids and they would do anything for you. Anything.
“Are you serious? My sanity, you say? Don’t you get it? It is nothing but a small price to back for their love.”
𝗽𝗼𝗿𝘁𝗿𝗮𝘆𝗲𝗱 𝗯𝘆: 𝘀𝗼𝗻𝗴 𝗸𝗮𝗻𝗴 / 𝗸𝗶𝗺 𝘀𝗲𝗷𝗲𝗼𝗻𝗴
Thomas Kaufmann / Theresa Kaufmann [M/F]: They are the newest addition to the town’s mediocre and, dare I say, irresponsible police force. The detective takes utmost pride in their deduction skills, but they have to say that the Helmsford cases has them both baffled and intrigued. With a charming smirk, Detective Kaufmann wears wit and confidence like an expensive outfit.
They think you are one of the most interesting person they have ever met. An ardent admirer of your intelligence, they gladly take up your help in catching the ‘Reaper of Helmsford’. Little do they know that they are a lot closer to the answers than they expected.
“Don’t you forget about me either, dear doctor. Who am I kidding, I’m extremely hard to forget.”
𝗽𝗼𝗿𝘁𝗿𝗮𝘆𝗲𝗱 𝗯𝘆: 𝗸𝗶𝘁 𝗯𝘂𝘁𝗹𝗲𝗿 / 𝗹𝗶𝗹𝗶 𝗿𝗲𝗶𝗻𝗵𝗮𝗿𝘁
Vivienne Malhotra [F]: A bleeding heart with a kind smile that always puts people at ease, Vivienne is a psychiatrist in the same hospital as you. All her life she has been taught to help everyone and treat them with kindness and it is something that she took quite literally when she pursued a specialisation in psychiatry. However, there is a storm of sadness raging behind the serene smile that she puts up for others.
Vivienne was the first person to befriend you from the hospital, even before the nurses. She also happens to be your therapist and the person who knows the most about your past. But she has an inkling that there is more to the story than you let on.
“Preventing your heart from forgiving someone you love is actually a hell of a lot harder than simply forgiving them.”
𝗽𝗼𝗿𝘁𝗿𝗮𝘆𝗲𝗱 𝗯𝘆: 𝗻𝗮𝗼𝗺𝗶 𝘀𝗰𝗼𝘁𝘁
Sebastián Navarro [M]: It was supposed to be a normal day where his Harry, his roommate, comes home and complains to him about his incompetent colleagues and the growing pile of unsolved cases. Now Harry is added to that list and Sebas is one of the prime suspects. He now struggles to bring up the mega-watt smile he used to possess and the nights spent being a private journalist has dark circles showing up under his eyes.
Sebas had given you his trust before he realised it. So much that he never realised that the person who took away his peace of mind could be the kind surgeon who had mend his fractured leg, as well as his heart.
“He was my best friend and a complete fool. I won’t ever forgive him for leaving me. So don’t you leave me either, okay?”
𝗽𝗼𝗿𝘁𝗿𝗮𝘆𝗲𝗱 𝗯𝘆: á𝗹𝘃𝗮𝗿𝗼 𝗿𝗶𝗰𝗼
- Play as a killer surgeon with a peculiar sense of justice and fun.
- Fully customize your character including: pronouns, gender, physical appearance, personality, sexuality, and more.
- What kind of a killer are you?
- Romance 1 out of 4 love interests (1 female, 1 male and two gender-selectable). Or not. It’s more fun to use people, isn’t it?
- Will you have some sort of morals in your twisted way of life, or are you as wicked as the people you slaughter?
- Gaslight. Gatekeep. Girlboss.
- Manipulate. Mansplain. Malewife.
- Why is the voice so eerily familiar to you?
- Unearth the cursed m̴̡̢̦̙̦͔̖̯̹͙̂̈́̊̀͝a̴̧̳̥̹̲̘̠̲̯̍̽̈͛̋͋́͘͠͝d̴̳̹̥͎̜̥̗͍͐̈͋͊̇n̷̡͇̋͆̓͊̓̑e̸̥̊́͊͛̾̾̈́̈́̿̚s̵͔̄s̴̡̞͈͈̜͓̔̇͊ͅ that has plagued your family for generations.
- Will you be able to keep your secrets hidden from the relationships you forge, or will the consequences of your actions eventually catch up to you?
- Inspired by media like ‘Rebecca’, ‘Psycho’, ‘Tomie’, ‘Strangers From Hell’, ‘Dexter’, ‘Hannibal’, etc.
WRITTEN BY: axel (he/him)
CODED BY: fish (any pronouns)
Status | In development |
Platforms | HTML5 |
Release date | Apr 29, 2023 |
Rating | Rated 4.8 out of 5 stars (215 total ratings) |
Authors | axel, SwimmingInFishGuts |
Genre | Interactive Fiction |
Made with | Twine |
Tags | Horror, Thriller, Twine |
Average session | A few minutes |
Languages | English |
Inputs | Keyboard, Mouse, Gamepad (any), Touchscreen, Smartphone |
Accessibility | Color-blind friendly, Configurable controls |
Links | Blog |
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The most fun and unique IF of this author is basically abandoned. Of course.
Maybe in another universe i can kiss wilson...
This is AWESOME i really like the theme and the story!! I'm super excited for the next chapter!
w8tin 4 the upd8 nya sugoiii >.<
( edit: 'O, prithee, I am enraptured, my soul doth yearn for the proclamation of yon renovation, this novel crafted as a work of art most divine and heavenly! O' How I adore the lore of the main character's noble famulus, and the grandiose ties that may unfold betwixt them and their kin, a relationship most complex and deep, ripe with potential. With great anticipation, I look toward the days ahead, eager to behold'st o' what future wonders shall unfold. )
does anyone have recommendations of if stories like this? ♡
I know one and it still being worked on I follow them on Patreon Slaughter squad
https://velveteenrabbit.itch.io/slsq
thhaannkss ♡♡
np I don't know played this called we wretched creature your not murder but it still very good and it's dark
https://darkfictionjude.itch.io/we-wretched-creatures
Im still waiting for the update 💔❤️
So I love this game and recently played the PJO game, but realized it was no longer up. I was just wondering if it was going to stay that way or if you planned to reupload it. Sorry to mention it on an entirely different game but I wasn't sure where else to ask.
I would also like to second this, hope that replying/asking under this comment is a good way of doing so. I am also curious if the PJO game was cancelled and was looking forwards to it so would like to know if it will continue. But I understand if it was stressful cause of the comments and stuff.
Hi, any updates on the second chapter? This was such a lovely experience and I would love it if you continue working on this ☆
damn i really want this to be finished D: but their last update was this year
Chapter one is already AMAZING!!! Can't wait for the second. <3
Great writing! When is the Chapter 2?
Never probably.
Why?!
The atmosphere and themes go so hard. Can't wait for more!
This was... incredible. IF is a direct hit or miss with me and despite only having one chapter so far I am horribly invested with this... It fits the vibe you're going for and is set up so beautifully, and I do hope you continue it, but don't stress yourself out too much, it takes a toll on the mind <3
This is brilliantly done so far. I love the feel of this IF, it's like a combination of Dexter and Hannibal (the tv series), which can only be a good thing because they were both awesome, yet it also has a freshness all its own. I'm smitten!
I truly hope you continue this story, cos it would be a terrible shame if it were to go unfinished. I'm really intrigued to see how you integrate romance in with the brutal/cold killer that is our MC (which, btw, I love!). I'm especially intrigued how it will work with Officer Kaufmann, seeing as it seems our interests lie very much in conflict. The seduction will likely be sublime. This relationship is what I'm most eager to check out!
And I have to mention that you have a fantastic writing voice - your style is clean and highly evocative, making the details of the story truly come alive in the reader's mind.
Although the Lightning Thief isn't really my jam (Just personal preference, I like 18+ stuff), this story and These Crimson Strings hit all the right notes with me! So good!
I hope you'll grace us with more. 😊❤
(Excuse my long ass post)
Hello, Axel!
I’ve played (the older updates) this game and These Crimson Strings and I had comeback to add them to play later so I could make sure I play the new updates along with your new game and I read about your whole issues with your new IF.
I just wanted to start about how much that sucks. As a IF writer myself and a fanfic writer as well that is a big fear of mine. It’s honestly stupid that people make these accusations (That are quite frankly serious. Accusing someone of plagiarism is a big thing). I think it’s lovely you’re making the IF though. I bet once I read it, it’ll heal my inner child. Mostly cause Percy Jackson was a big childhood comfort that kept me from being alone, along with stuff like Harry Potter and Warrior Cats.
Just know you’re doing a great job and I doubt enough people tell you this. You barely know me but just know I’m proud of your work as a fellow writer :)
-R* from EstuFAWN Studios
This is really good
i saw chapter 1 and couldnt go further, i wanted to cryyyy, i love this sm and ur writing is amazing and my character being a murderous villain makes me giddy bc i love evil women
So, I'm not sure if you got into any trouble that ended in you and the other author <span class="NormalTextRun SCXW265944871 BCX0" <deleting<="" span="">deleting the other IF or if you just got stressed out from all the hate comments. I’m not usually one to comment since I like to maintain a neutral viewpoint for every argument. But let me get this straight-</span>
Main comments (I remember) on other IF:
-Plagiarizing the percy jackson book plus this is not fanfiction if you used wording in the exact format as Riordan. (Insert pic as proof that it was indeed a PJO fanfiction)
-This twine isn’t good wording it’s terrible and you were sooo lazy with the writing (Response: No, it's because they copied off Rick riordan) Oh yeah! Th<span class="NormalTextRun SCXW139904204 BCX0" <th<="" span="">at’s why we're all upset, thanks.</span>
-You’re making money off this with Kofi donations! This is a disgrace to PJO and I'm a long-term fan
My POV:
-Yeah, plagiarism is disrespectful but it’s a fanfiction and they're<span class="NormalTextRun SCXW11207198 BCX0" <they’re<="" span=""> using the main plot possibly to build on to that for their own story inspired off of PJO</span>
-Everyone is saying it was lazy writing when the only times you used the writing from riordan was when it was necessary for plot building, from what I remember of the IF you didn’t just copy and paste you wrote your own story then added some sentences from PJO and even shortened them for your fanfiction.
-<span class="NormalTextRun SCXW199381555 BCX0" <there’s<="" span="">There's also a lot more work than all the angry mob is giving you guys credit for, and I understand that writing is difficult. They probably don’t understand since the hardest thing<span class="NormalTextRun SCXW199381555 BCX0" <they’ve<="" span=""> they've </span>accomplished was how to join a twitter mob.</span> I seriously cringed yesterday reading their comments
-The DEFINITION of plagiarism is "The practise of taking someone else's work or ideas and passing them off as one's own.” Most commenters suggested you re-write the sentences used from PJO, but that’s actual plagiarism pretending that it was your og writing and idea, then just taking inspiration from the book. It was clearly fanfiction meant to show admiration towards Riordan’s writing and PJO. It was even labelled as “the lightning thief” so it was 100% not you taking riordan’s work and passing it off as your own.
-You authors weren’t making money off it and I'm not a legal expert, but it had at least 2-3 paragraphs from the book and since it’s a twine you could never guess what the canon PJO was if you’ve never read it. And no, donations absolutely do not count since it wasn’t pay to read.
-Later on, the plot might’ve changed too and would have even less of Riordan's writings since it was your own story that was a fanfiction off of PJO's problem and setting.
-People were not just “calling you out” they were harassing you authors for social points when the message that it was plagiarized was delivered multiple times.
-I don’t get why everyone was discouraging PJO fanfiction since they claimed they were such fans. “You don’t have to put one person down to praise another”; which was exactly what they were doing. But I've seen my share of most of the PJO fandom and they harass anyone in the name of Riordan, (the only time it was acceptable was probably the first two movies since Riordan said it wasn't what he wanted).
-<span class="NormalTextRun SCXW252342659 BCX0" <this="" upsets<="" span="">This upsets me because it reminds me of the angry twitter mob calling out people for taking inspiration from other cultures (often the victim's own) for their non-</span>american accessories and clothing. It’s similar because they harassed the victims who were not culture-appropriating. They were not acting disrespectfully with the clothes. And that mob was acting as if they were part of that culture, which most people from part of that culture were alright with random people respecting and showing admiration with their clothing and culture. As I believe what you were showing with riordan’s writing. But only riordan can say whether or not he found your IF disrespectful.
-In my opinion it was better to just use Riordan's writings instead of re-writing it. Since that would be diminishing riordan’s writings and actually plagiarizing since you’re claiming it as your own. (since im petty I hoped you’d add the book pages to each of riordan’s writings because it would’ve become obvious that those few sentences were not major plot points of canon PJO and the amount of writing you added yourselves would’ve been clear, but I'm not a legal expert so it might’ve gotten you in trouble.)
I'm also sorry for whatever happened but I understand that you deleted it, I hope you just decided to do what was best for you and the other author and not just respond out of fear of the PJO fandom. I hoped you did whatever was best to bring you peace of mind and not just to satisfy the miserable gremlins of the internet. I also like your and riordan's writings so it was pretty easy to find multiple viewpoints from both sides, which were a bit biased tbh. Not sure if you plan on further addressing the missing IF and sorry if I brought it up I didn't know how else to contact you.
hey there! can i just that i’m really thankful review 😭 i can’t lie and say that the comments in TLT weren’t giving me a headache but it’s the internet and you can’t please everyone, especially if they do not properly read the disclaimers.
the whole point was for the fanfiction to directly mirror PJO’s writing because it was a conversion of the books into a more interactive setting. i thought it’d be fun to add some of my own touches and characters to it but apparently, that was the entire reason for its downfall 😅
i’m rewriting it to add more of my own ideas and word the sentences and paragraphs better. i won’t be changing anything which was the essence of the PJO books because it is still a direct mirror of them and for now, my only concern is the legal aspects of it. although most of that would be solved by making it completely not-for-profit.
people who’d like to read it that way can do it. people who won’t like it shall ignore its existence. but suffice to say, it’s still being worked on and god forbid the plotline and sentences are exactly as they’re written in the books because, i don’t know, i clearly stated that it was supposed to be that way?
thank you again for this comment, i’m glad at least someone got the entire point of the TLT fanfiction.
For whatever it's worth, I agree completely with the previous commenter. I adore the series, and as I expressed in a comment back on the original page for the very first version, I was hella excited about it. While fanfiction is great, being able to actually 'play' the series with my own custom made protagonist? That was a mad cool idea, and everyone who got pissed about it, did so because they didn't even bother to read the disclaimer you made about how it was meant to be a interactive fanfic-ish take on the series, and was made entirely in appreciation for the original work. None of their criticism was valid, because all they wanted to do was kick up a fuss about the entire situation, just because they could do so. Their outrage was entirely selfish, and when boiled down was all simply done because they wanted drama. And you and the other author didn't at all deserve that.
Hey, I'm so sorry to hear you're being bombarded by people like that. I was only worried about the lifting of words directly from Riordan and what others might think of the Kofi (unlinked) in your description. I'm not sure who decided to go above and beyond to harass you, but I hope you're able to report them on Discord, here, and Tumblr. If you ever need anything, please feel free to reach out. You can find me @trailshome 0r @clamoribusrogamina -- I'm happy to listen to you vent or just shoot the shit or smth.
I've watched other authors get harassed and have been harassed myself. I don't know how much help I can be, but I'm always down to lend an ear to a fellow author. Wishing you the best and am excited for updates to your games. (I adore Moreau sm!!)
Sending you hugs and well wishes!! Don't let those posers get you down! They just want to start something to start something! <3
hey, I just wanted to say I really like your Lightning Thief interactive. I'm sorry you have to deal with all the people giving hate for it. I'm excited to see future chapters and hopefully the other books. while I love the books it is nice to be able to do your own character design and your interactive has done just that. I wish you the best of luck in the future. (Also, I'm sorry if you didn't want comments on it, I just wanted to give support for an amazing project)
NOOO DID IT END FOR EVERYONE ELSE AS IT SAID END OF CHAPTER ONE? NOOO I WAS JUST GETTING INTO ITT
haha don’t worry, i’m working on the next chapter rn and it should be out sometime this month or the next
That's Awesome ty for letting me know!!
Yea I know the feeling
So a surgeon Dexter ??
+ some paranormal shit
THE POOR BIRD. IT MADE ME CRY WHEN IT DIED 😭
Same D:
Excited for more! I always want to see more horror elements in Twine games so I am so happy when I found this one :D
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Marvelous!! Truly marvelous! I loved the introduction and adored how the story is written. I'm so looking forward to reading more of it. 100/10 to the author! You did fantastic!! :D
The game just says "no valid storage adapters found" every time I try to play :(
If your using PrivacyBadger or a similar add-on on your browser it interferes with Twine games. Turning it off should let you play.
the way I am fully taken in. I will never not be thinking about this IF now.
does someone know the name of the song that´s constantly playing in the backround????
Even though it's brief, this is such an incredible start, and I can't wait for the future updates to come!!
Hmm very interesting, extremely short however but I do like it. Let's see what happens next.
inspired by STRANGER FROM HELL!!
GURL SLAYYYYYYYYYY IM EXCITED FOR THE NEXT UPDATES!!
ooh murder sibling and sleep walk the song? You might like this amv: Sleep Walk | AMV | Sir fluff
My god, was this absolutely stunning from presentation to story telling. I adore how dark the story could be from the slivers that we can see, and the intrigue behind the MC's backstory especially with them being twins with such an apathetic person like their twin is such an interesting parallel on the current version of themselves which makes you wonder just what happened in the MC's past for them to become like this.
I also like how people are charmed by MC because it just shows how terrifying MC can be, posing as a normal person but someone you can't help but adore-- Brings you chills especially knowing MC is capable of. I also like how you added the fact that MC can be as cruel and twisted as the people they kill, or horribly holding on to their morals as they dish out karma knowing the hypocrisy of their actions.
I genuinely can't wait for it as the MC I'm currently building is someone who tries to avoid spreading bloodshed and anger, and seems to want the normal life they've build as a cover more than the life they actually have. Making it sick and twisted how there are these voices that taunt and tempt them to do things that appeal to MC's dark side.
I'd love to see more of MC interacting with people and them having to plan how to kill someone, especially because of how different of the lives MC has. Also if it was possible if MC in the "moral" route would feel unfathomable guilt for what they're doing yet either being delusional or acknowledging they're far too gone to ever be saved.
Another thing I'd like to note is if there would be any music to come since so far there was music at the title screen and if you would update the portfolio of MC since the gender when choosing non-binary has it locked on Child which is kinda funny to me.
Either way! I'm looking forward to the development of this IF!
This was hella good and so, so well written! I'll be here waiting for more and i have to say that im listening to all your playlists and you have a very, very good music taste! Hope you both stay safe and healthy! kisses
Extremely, very, really, dreadfully, terribly, awfully, fearfully, abnormally, incredibly, amazingly, exceptionally, exceedingly, immensely, uncommonly, remarkably, extraordinarily excited for this game!
I'm such a big fan of the concept, the characters and the MC and especially the writing, love this 🤍
REALLY REALLLLY GOOD I love it hope it continues I really really do so well done >w<
Wow this demo was amazingly written. Good job and looking forward to the release of the upcoming chapters
Cant wait for chapter 2 call me mad but I'm in love with the twin :)